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feedback on my profile please. - 10/28/2007 11:24:57 PM

tvgeishajade

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hello there. i've been working on my profile, and would like some feedback on the content of it. If you could do me the honour of looking and giving me some constructive feedback. Thanks.

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RE: feedback on my profile please. - 10/29/2007 11:34:09 AM

pahunkboy

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Your profile is better then several. Maybe weed out some of your interests so it is concise. Most people fly thru and wont read all of it.

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RE: feedback on my profile please. - 10/29/2007 11:52:14 AM

toservez

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Good:

I think you come off as sincere and communicate it is not about your kinky needs.

Bad:

Get rid of the green color. Easier to read the better and this means good old black.

Nothing really in the essay part that is personal in nature. What you have written is more just a vague philosophical goal. I think most would like to know something about the actual you in terms of you as a regular person and your interests, goals and your personality. I would also throw in some specifics in the type of relationship you think you want. The profile on the whole comes off a little bit of I will talk to anyone interested and not so much about finding the right one.

I wish you well in your search!

Lin

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I am sorry I do not fit Webster's defintion of a slave but thankfully my Master is not Webster.

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RE: feedback on my profile please. - 10/29/2007 12:49:03 PM

YesMistressIrish

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Jade,

I really liked your profile a lot. You are very clear on where you are now and where you hope to end up.
I like the green color. You express yourself in bdsm ways clearly. I would suggest changing things a little:
Since you are a slave at heart I would suggest stating in your profile the skills you have to bring to the table now, any real life training you have in cooking, cleaning, computers, carpentry, massage, etc.

Although you feel like a slave, Dommes will want to know what you are like vanilla wise to see if you might be a good match for their houshold and needs.So mention a few of those and close out some of the options you have chosen on the left side of your profile as it is way too much reading.

Post here on the boards, and many will get to know you.

Mostly, have Fun!

Miss Irish

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