BitaTruble
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ORIGINAL: spatejak Hi there I'm reintroducing a product (myself) to market and am conducting a survey of potential customers (female submissives/slaves on CollarMe). Cute. quote:
1. I would be interested in knowing what you think of my profile? I think it looks nice, but I'm a guy so what do I know. Okay, just remember that you asked, okay? Are we clear on that? You did ask, okay? I completely agree with your second sentence. "I think it looks nice, but I'm a guy so what do I know." Bingo. Not much .. but you've got some potential.. the sense of humor is a huge plus in my book. First, get a new pic. The body language screams CLOSED, uncooperative, uncommnicative. Not good. The text of the profile isn't exactly 'bad' but it does sorta jump out as a bit playerish and desperate which, if that's what you're hoping, no harm no foul. It just doesn't sound like you are serious but if serious falls into your lap, that's okay. The play's the thing though.. as the bard says.. and that's what your profile says to me.. the plays the thing and the toy itself is fairly fungible. Not very complimentary to your average fem type human. "I realize that before I can strip you, whip you, and treat you like the lowest thing that crawls the earth, I have to convince you that I'm a nice guy who cares about you and your needs." This should probably be removed all together. It sends the wrong message. I might very well want to get treated like the lowest thing that crawls on the Earth, but if you 'are' a nice guy you won't have to convince me.. you just have to be yourself and I'll be able to see it. Having to 'convince' me tells me that it's something you have to work at in order to get to the end result that you're seeking. Onwards and upwards! quote:
2. What kind of message should I send with the profile? I tend to think of it as a cover letter attached to a resume and write something businesslike ("I saw your profile and found it interesting. I would ask you to look at my profile and, if it interests you, please get back to me."), maybe referring to some detail in her profile to show that I've actually read it. This has not been very successful. I'm aware that most approaches will not elicit a reply. The right approach though, will always elicit a reply. ::grins:: The problem is, you are writing for the generic masses because you have absolutely no preferences at all as to the type of woman you are seeking so when someone receives an email from you then goes to your profile they have no clue at all who you are or what you're really looking for in a woman. Fungible, Spatejak. Fungible is bad. quote:
What would you notice among this detrius? I would notice .. amazing. Why settle for less when I know amazing is out there? :) quote:
I thank you for your consideration, You're very welcome. quote:
PS: If you actually are interested in my profile, please get back to me Cute part 2. quote:
PPS: How do I replace this stupid ice-cream cone with another symbol? Keep posting. It changes as your post count goes up. Celeste
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"Oh, so it's just like Rock, paper, scissors." He laughed. "You are the wisest woman I know."
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