topcat -> RE: OK to ask for critique of profile? (10/13/2005 2:46:26 PM)
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Midear Fiddlegirl- I found it well written, easily read (if a tad long) and over all give it a seven- add a photo for an eight. I might , strictly for stylistic reasons, remove >>>Here are some details about who I am and who I'm looking for. Please write if you think we may have some common ground. <<< and >>>Cheers, Fiddlegirl<<< from your opening, and >>>Having said that, I realize that folks at Collarme tend more to the D/s end of the pool than to S&M; I'd be open to trying out the submissive role part-time to see how it goes.<<< from the first paragraph. That brings us up to a nine, I think. Shorten it by about a paragraph or so, and we'd make a ten. Don't be too concerned about leaving things out- that's what email is for. Overall a great ad, just as it is. Good luck in the hunt, Stay warm, Lawrence
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