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stella41b -> RE: Advice For Submissives from Midori (6/12/2008 9:32:59 PM)
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I'm sorry, but I really do have to be critical here. Really great as an article? Reading through the thread it makes me wonder. Are some of you really oh so easily pleased, or just as easily fooled, or both?
I read through the entire article looking for the answer to the one simple question - 'why?' Why has this article been written? To teach people common sense? Merely to state that if you find good people outside D/s they will be good people in D/s? I mean, this is hardly rocket science or applied psychology or is it? The underlying tone which I picked up was I'm better than you because I know this and you don't. The article itself is little more than a collection of statements and principles. This was the One Twue Way, the tone arrogant, of preaching to the 'unenlightened masses'. The writer is out of touch with her audience - people new to D/s. The assumption that they wouldn't know such a basic and fundamental principle, or at least have worked it out from their own experience, is offensive. It is offensive to assume that they do not know how to communicate with others. It is offensive to assume that they are dishonest, or indeed lack that basic common sense.
This article raises some interesting questions. Who is real as a human being and who isn't? What is a true relationship and what is a false relationship? Just what is the writer trying to get at?
There is no substance to this article, and I use the term article loosely here, as I am more inclined to agree with the author and read this as a stream of consciousness, loose random thoughts, ramblings, and not much more. The subject matter is D/s, and relationships formed within the community, human interaction, activities shared between people. There are no examples given, no explanations, not even drawing on one's own experiences, and therefore no real way of knowing or understanding how the writer has formed any sort of basis for her thoughts. This is a serious flaw, for writing is a form of communication, a way of expressing thoughts and what lies behind those thoughts, and this article communicates nothing more than a stated thesis and a collection of random thoughts and assertions. This is a fine example of style over substance.
Therefore there are none of the logical devices used in expository writing, none of the points have been developed, there is no attempt at definition, no attempt at forming any comparisons, no explanations as to cause and effect, none of the devices employed by almost everyone here in their postings on the threads on these boards. It's okay you thinking what you think and having your opinions and views, but unless you are able to articulate them, expand and explain you're just making statements and not really communicating very much. This being the English language the onus for communication is very much on the writer. Not least if you really want to get your point or message across.
Below you have the statement 'Midori is a globetrotting sexpert, who parties and teaches cool classes on fun sex and wild kink all over the world.' which is separate from the article. It says a lot that I had to find out who she is from other posters on this thread and that it wasn't clear or evident from what she wrote in this article. I'm sorry but I find no evidence of her authority or expert knowledge in such an article. I just read something that the majority of posters here could come up with in say 5 minutes of thinking.
I'm sorry but this article gave me nothing new, and even if I was as thick and unenlightened as the author assumed I was I don't feel that this would have changed. Please forgive me, but I see it as a couple of hundred words written to express what any rational, thinking person could have expressed in less than fifty.
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