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Profile - 10/10/2008 8:47:08 AM

mbamasub

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Hello. i just updated my profile and was wondering if i could get some opinions on it .
Thank you

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RE: Profile - 10/10/2008 10:59:20 AM

dangerousangel

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I appologize, this probably makes me a bad person, but I can't get past the fact that you don't use apostrophes. Gramatical errors pretty much inevitably make me skip on to the next. (I'm not your target demographic, though.)

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RE: Profile - 10/10/2008 11:07:18 AM

RCdc

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Hello and welcome to CM!
I am not a female dominant, so take this as you wish.

Personally, I like your profile. I can imagine you speaking it which is always cool. I like the fact you mention your self improvement - that rocks. I have dyslexia so I do understand how difficult it is to use correct grammar consistantly, but I would recommend you up the 'I's and punctuate well.

Drop the 'feel free to message me' bit ad re-word it... something closer to how open you are to accepting mail - like 'All mail gratefully received' or 'All mail is read and I appriciate anyone who takes some time to contact me'. It's just the way you word it really. If you can, add some more hobbies to the list other than martial arts etc. Also, list some thing you can offer - like, do you cook? Can you do bookwork? Are you good with figures? Things like that.

Those are just ideas, but I do like the way you started the profile. Best thoughts to you!

the.dark.

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RE: Profile - 10/10/2008 11:08:28 AM

Coupleofwhats

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Grammatical errors aside, you're off to a good start. (And when I was 19, I stopped capitalizing and such in my non-academic writing too. It seems to be a common phase.)

You understand some basic tenents that men thrice your age have yet to grasp: kudos!

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RE: Profile - 10/10/2008 11:15:14 AM

mbamasub

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Thank all of you for the advice i really appreciate the input and will correct my gramatical errors

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RE: Profile - 10/10/2008 11:36:37 AM

Sylverdawn

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I rarely use apostrophes either I write like I think sort of stream of consciousness.. but I do appreciate correction of spelling errors... as long as the thought process is cohesive and the sentences make sense Im good.

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RE: Profile - 10/10/2008 3:24:30 PM

MmeGigs

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Your profile is great, but the best profile in the universe isn't going to do you a lot of good unless you are out there contacting women who appeal to you. Your first email to these women is at least as important as a good profile, probably more important. Read her profile, respond specifically to things that she says in her profile in your initial email to her and you're more likely to get her attention. Ask her questions about things you read in her profile and you'll encourage her to respond to you.

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RE: Profile - 10/14/2008 5:05:42 PM

UWILLSERVEUS

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I liked your profile

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RE: Profile - 10/14/2008 6:47:58 PM

ExKat

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The profile content was good. The grammar, not so much. I know I'm not the only grammar nazi around here. Even if you're not so good with the grammar yourself, simply copy and pasting that into Word will help you with the capitalization problems, the spelling errors, and the punctuation.

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