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Survival 2 - 10/17/2009 7:21:08 AM   
Ellise56


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I awake cold, too cold I know by the chill that it is night and I am naked, I feel cloth raped on my head to stop the bleeding.  My eyes are covered again, my mouth dry and also tied tighter. I am in the same position as before I hear people above me. Music a party, that bastard is having a party while I am down here starving.
The good news I don’t have to pee any longer, I start to think … dare I say plan … a way out but the only way out is for this big swine to trust me, I’ll have to earn it. Wonder if anyone is looking for me?  Doesn’t matter they won’t be able to find me in a basement .no one knows I took the grave ‘don’t go into the grave yard, there are ghost and creepy old men who have lost their wives’ I laughed at them all of them including my parents. Why must I be so stubborn well if I get out this I’ll know to pay more mind to their words next time won’t I. I hear you walking above me, you stop above the crack that let the water in, and I hear you speaking to someone telling them about a gift, for them under where you stand. Oh dear lord you mean me after all I’ve been though and now your pawning me off on some else your one sick puppy. May God have mercy on your sick soul because with the people I know, you should be lucky to be breathing once they find my or body either way you’ll pay. I haven’t noticed till now that you’ve moved and I wait for the door to open. I hear it the door open. I shake the fallen ceiling from my head. As the two of you walk in.more to come * reveiws are welcome*
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RE: Survival 2 - 10/18/2009 3:38:19 PM   
Mac001


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This is the second part of the same story. The story line is good but you need to put both chapters as one story not two seperate stories. Click on the "post reply" button at the bottom of the screen to add chapters instead of posting them as new stories and hurry up and write the next chapter.

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