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I came across a beautiful amazing Goddess Domme - a true beauty on an online site (I have since switched my allegiance to CollarMe.com!:-). Everything on her profiled (and pics) struck a chord! OMG, I ached at the thought of pleasing and serving her - all the time trying not (seriously, i'm not in this for the pain) to screw up and thinking about how iut would be for her to consumate her superiority over me (and pleasure in my service) by bending me over the arm of the sofa and taking me with her lifelike strap-on!...
Alas, the poem didn't do the trick (sigh) but since this is my first day on CollarMe - I thought I'd share. Maybe you could critique it, suggest ways I could have improved my chances. Should I write more? I thought it was kinda cool having a poem written for someone (well, I guess its cool, unless you think it sucks! LOL).
Andy
PS
Her profile said she was pagan.
Enjoy: (or not:-)
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Ah Sweet Goddess
Andy B.
12/9/2010
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Ah sweet goddess
Delicious your vision be
Even through blood-stained filter
I am bound to thee
In shallow panting certainty
Ah sweet Goddess
Already I am bewitchd and pagan bound.
What Magick is this that enslaves a fresh heart?
So effortlessly!
Too late I see you Pagan proud
Wiccan and Witch too I do not wonder
Fool am I to linger and stare at that witches eye
Mesmerized.
Ah sweet Goddess
Were you cauldron busy this eve past?
With spell and words ancient whispered softly.
Arousing Mother Goddess from her warm moist earth
Did you catch your breath as your conjurers' trick
Turned autumnal eyes to the runes at her gnarled feet
Ah sweet goddess
I can see the unfolding events with sweet clarity
Smiling at first, Mother Earth chuckles, and then laughs
A maelstrom of laughter and leaves
Enveloping you both as you too join in the merriment.
Ah sweet Goddess
Sweet clarity your magick has undone me
I am consumed with a love and devotion for you
As if my love for thee never experienced the light of day
Ne'er in all the flavors of Earth
Even as Mother Goddess fades - content - back into this one
A pitiful little man is left.
Me.
Vanquished thoughts of superiority and false idols
Ah sweet Goddess
Please accept my gift
Pitiful tho this vision be
Even as I bumble and stumble
Like an amateur on his big break
Please Goddess, ponder this slaves humble application
Unworthy as I am
Mesmerized
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A Poem I wrote to catch a Domme's eye - 
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