Aileen1968
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Joined: 12/12/2007 From: I miss Shore, New Jersey Status: offline
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ORIGINAL: knottyme4u Hello, I have been trying to connect up with other locals here in the Sacramento area. I am having the worst time figuring out what to write. I would like to hear what seems to work for other members. Here is a sample of what I have written that is NOT working!! "This is funny for me... this seems so cold and impersonal but I guess this is the only way I know how to meet someone with similar interests. I read your profile and I would like to see if you are interested. If you are, I will write you about me and we can go from there." Your feedback will be greatly appreciated. When I had an active profile, I knew within the first five words whether or not that person had any chance. You, I would have deleted probably before I even finished reading your email. For me, the number one criteria an email had to pass was whether or not I could stand hearing the person speak the words they wrote. In other words, the email had to sound like how they talked in real life. And I'm not talking about netspeak. You sound like a generic robot in my head. Anyone who has gotten an email from Shore would know instantly what he sounded like and what his personality was without ever meeting him just from his choice of words. It must be a hard thing to do. Out of the thousands of emails that I received here, his was the only one that ever struck me like that. Plus, he sent a smoking hot pic of himself too....
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