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i gotta ask (profile help) - 8/1/2006 9:47:47 PM

nerdyryan

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Okay, I gotta ask. How much of a prick do I come off as in my profile? Cause I'm REALLY trying not to do as such, but I have the horrible tendency to come off as an arrogant braggart (I'm a TERRIBLE writer, really I am heh). So, I figured I'd ask for help. I would more than welcome suggestions for improvement. Thanks!

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RE: i gotta ask (profile help) - 8/1/2006 9:58:01 PM

kc692

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Actually, other than the visual offered by one "chomping" on another, it is honest, which is always a good thing. Flowery isn't always best....of course, even though you say gender is not important, I can only present my opinion, and that is of a female domme, the male dominants(and other females of course) may look at it differently.

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RE: i gotta ask (profile help) - 8/1/2006 10:09:25 PM

Misstoyou

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If you really are interested in female dominants as well as male, I'd move the paragraph that starts with this sentence: "I list myself as a gay sub though, in reality, I'm generally not looking for sex so gender matters little to me (trans included, I do take that 'love knows no gender business to heart')." up some, and have it under the paragraph ending "...so here I am!"
I just think it's buried too far down. I, personally, probably wouldn't take the time to read that far down in an identified gay male's profile.

Otherwise, it's definitely non-generic. lol It's clear, and gives a good idea of the individual behind the profile, which definitely puts you a step ahead in finding someone compatible.

** edited to provide my reason for the suggestion.

< Message edited by Misstoyou -- 8/1/2006 10:13:39 PM >

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RE: i gotta ask (profile help) - 8/1/2006 10:27:03 PM

nerdyryan

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Thank you most kindly for your suggestions. Heh I kinda like the chomping line and I can see the point about moving the 'love sees no gender' bit (gonna wait till tomorrow to do the changes just cause of the approval process). Anything else?

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