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Lashra -> RE: Critiquing my profile....I'm told it screams "NEEDY"! (9/7/2006 8:18:48 AM)

No you do not sound needy at all. To me you sound intelligent and that you know yourself very well, a claim that alot of people cannot make. You know what it is you are looking for in life. Apparently that Dom was looking for a titty pic and a profile that reads DO ME anytime, anywhere, anyplace, any way...

~Lashra



maybemaybenot -> RE: Critiquing my profile....I'm told it screams "NEEDY"! (9/7/2006 8:32:59 AM)

Erin:
I think your profile is just fine. it gives a pretty nice overview of yourself, your interests, your wants.

The part that cracks me up is the men who write us and tell us what's wrong with what our profiles say about us. If they don't like it...... move along.
A few days ago I got an e mail from a person who asked me if I was serious about football being a hard limit. I wrote saying well.. yeah kind of. Explained I am a season ticket holder and share my season tickets with my sister and brother in law. That I go to half the games, they the other half, but that I love all football and watch the games and follow it closly all season. Not just the home team. He writes back and asks if I expect to be allowed to spend my Sundays " lazying on the couch watching the boob tube ". < lmao > I wrote back " why, yes, I do. but only during football season ". His repsonse was this:
" You will have to make a compromise. You get one game a week to watch and you must watch it naked". It just cracked me up, I wrote back and politely told him I would have to decline such a generous offer. < um not really, but I did decline > LOL
Anyway.. I take these people who critique or try to tell us that what we have set down as " who we are" in our profiles as amusement material. I like to play cat and mouse with them more than ignore then. They barged into my e mail box  so all is fair game.
And I will say that once.. just once.. one of these interlopers was persistant and turned out to be a really cool guy. Just not relationship compatable with me.  He is my friend and I totally enjoy his company.

               mbmbn

PS: and to the men : I am writing my experience, I am sure many of you have had your own female interlopers.



NastyDaddy -> RE: Critiquing my profile....I'm told it screams "NEEDY"! (9/7/2006 9:07:06 AM)

Did you hold your laptop up to the mirror and read your profile correctly as he did? See there you needy putz!  [:D]



KatyLied -> RE: Critiquing my profile....I'm told it screams "NEEDY"! (9/7/2006 9:24:24 AM)

Meh.  You know you're too good for him!



MrrPete -> RE: Critiquing my profile....I'm told it screams "NEEDY"! (9/7/2006 11:14:08 AM)

mistoferin,

Great pictures! Great hair! Great eyes! Great cleavage!

I don't think you  sound needy but it's too long as far as I'm concerned.

A profile should be like a woman's skirt. Short enough to make it interesting but long enough to cover the subject.

I don't understand why submissive woman don't include their lifestyle preferences, and only mention vanilla stuff, on their checklist. Vanilla interest are important but lifesyle compatibility is more important. I look at the dislikes [soft limits to me] and the Hard Limits to see if there are any conflicts with my preferences.

What's the purpose of a resume? To get the interview. When a resume is too long it goes into the circular file.
A profile's purpose is to develop enoug interest to get the conversation going.

For example: You spend several lines on your drinking preferences whe saying "I'm a light social drinker" would be enough.



happypervert -> RE: Critiquing my profile....I'm told it screams "NEEDY"! (9/7/2006 11:24:22 AM)

It didn't scream "needy" to me; wasn't even whispering it.

The only improvement I suggest is breaking apart some of the long paragraphs into smaller ones to make it easier to read.



topcat -> RE: Critiquing my profile....I'm told it screams "NEEDY"! (9/7/2006 11:34:21 AM)

Dear Erin-
 
nope- read it, re-read it, read the rest of this thread and read it again. Still not getting 'needy'.
 
I do agree with M.Pete that it could likely be trimmed a bit, and a few paragraph breaks would make it more readable. I use, as a rule of thumb, that the hight of the paragraph should be about the same as it width (an inane, ridiculios rule, BUT it does seem to work<g>).
 
Stay warm,
Lawrence



WhipTheHip -> RE: Critiquing my profile....I'm told it screams "NEEDY"! (9/7/2006 2:20:43 PM)

I'd much rather have a "needy" partner than one that doesn't need
anyone. 



stockingluvr54 -> RE: Critiquing my profile....I'm told it screams "NEEDY"! (9/7/2006 2:36:56 PM)

I took a peek and it looks well thought out and reveals alot about yourself that's important. Didn't seem needy....???  But then again...most of us here are needy...we needy partners!



mistoferin -> RE: Critiquing my profile....I'm told it screams "NEEDY"! (9/7/2006 5:49:00 PM)

Thanks everyone for all of the helpful suggestions, the kind words....and for taking the time to actually read it. After my surgery maybe I will do a bit or reworking it while I am on down time. It will give me something to occupy myself with.



Tikkiee -> RE: Critiquing my profile....I'm told it screams "NEEDY"! (9/7/2006 5:55:12 PM)

Nope.
Sorry.
 
I saw nothing in your profile that screams 'NEEDY'. It's very well thought out and explicit. [:)]



SirKenin -> RE: Critiquing my profile....I'm told it screams "NEEDY"! (9/7/2006 7:51:42 PM)

Ok.  Another opinion if you do not mind.  The pictures, while titillating, look like you are trying to sell your body.  They look like you are trying to use your cleavage as your main selling point.  That was the first impression that I got when I viewed your profile.  I for one do not find that attractive.  I find that it cheapens the woman.  Obviously you have a lot more to offer than your boobs, so you may want to give that some thought if this critique is of any value to you.  Besides, do you want someone that thinks with their dick or thinks with their head and heart?  Just food for thought.

Second, you did not at all appear needy.  Not at all.  I felt that you came across as confident (which was signifcantly dampened by your "pose") and sincere.  However, I did feel that your profile was entirely too long and when I got to the end I had lost interest.  I do not have the longest attention span as it is, but then again neither do many potential suitors.  We skim through profiles, and if something catches our eye we read a bit.  If they are just rambling on or talking all about them or what they will not put up with (you know the ones), we just move on.

With that said, what I felt your profile could really benefit from was something to draw the reader into what you were saying.  Immediately capture their attention and keep their eyes there throughout the entire rendition...  Not just that, but maintain that periodically throughout the profile.  You have to do that if you are going to have a long profile and keep their attention.

People tend to easily forget one thing, a valuable lesson I learned several years ago (but never applied to My profile because I simply do not care).  Internet surfers are skimmers.  I learned that from designing websites.  That is what you are up against.

Anyways, I will leave that up to you as is for now.  You may not even appreciate what I have already told you.  If you do have questions though I would be happy to help you as best I can, either here or on the other side.



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