mgdartist
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Joined: 5/13/2006
From: irving tx
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Thats pretty good man.
No idea how a dominant could write something so insightful about submissives.
lol, jk. I have no critique, as poetry can be rather difficult to critique, outside punctuation/spelling, and often even grammar isnt an area where poetry can be denegrated, Since it is often not grammatically correct on purpose. The lack of oblique metaphor in yours might be something a english or literary professor might address, but I personally always found their drivel totally annoying, even though I always had a knack for ferretting out the hidden meanings and obscured inferrences everyone else in the class were utterly unaware of. I know of, and do admire your bravado in posting such here, and since you had the nerve, here is my latest. Just don't let the title offend until youve grasped the content...lol:
I have a Penis
I have a penis,
for which I am cursed,
envied, villified and revered.
It is seen as the seat of my inner desire, and truest self,
albeit wrongly so,
although it often seems to think for itself,
and act of its own confounded volition,
power and purpose.
While it has given me such pleasures,
and joys,
It is driven by the primal force
of which I must fear, hardly fathom,
yet longingly reconnoiter it's targets,
It has conversly brought great sorrow,
evil, tragedy and travesty.
It makes me a fool;
It makes me a God.
It creates.
It destroys.
It cannot be ruled,
or possessed,
yet I can take it in hand.
It can be worshipped,
as odalisques do,
as those who seek and adore
it's power and charms.
In dubious exaltation it will rise
and with enough encouragement,
stupidly hold forth it's essence.
It's seeds.
As many as the stars in the heavens,
for which my body has dutifully striven
to gain and replenish,
then nourish and support,
as a perfunctory bodily function.
It's priority of "survival"
cannot be altered.
It seems to know
it's essence is beautiful,
LIFEFORCE,
yet it's essence is vile,
or seen so by many.
While it's purpose is victory,
over life itself,
thru cleansing, rejuvenation
and regeneration,
I know it can and does defeat me,
and instigates filth and squalor,
and invokes my deviance. I have a penis,
and by it's virtue,
and lack of same,
I am a man.
MGD 2006..
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