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RedMagic1 -> RE: Need some critique (2/25/2008 10:26:00 PM)
quote: ORIGINAL: thickerdenwater sometimes they come easy, and abruptly disappear (in which case I have no idea what happens) That is a problem. If they vanished and you knew why -- "I came on too strong," "I wasn't strong enough," etc. -- you could correct what you were doing and have a better shot the next time. Keep track and see if you can identify a pattern. People often say, "It's the internet. People go poof. Life goes on." On the one hand, that is true. On the other hand, I consider that a BS comment, because people do things for a reason, and if I am going to invest my time in someone, I want to maximize my chances of getting a positive result out of our interactions. So it is important to know WHY things happened. Can you think of something common that happens while you are talking to these subs you end up not meeting?

AquaticSub -> RE: Need some critique (2/25/2008 10:27:28 PM)
~Fast Reply~ I'd be turned off by the "discarded" thing, probably because you don't specify further what it takes to be discarded. I don't know what kind of woman you are looking to attract but if I were looking I'd like to know if family is important to them and a couple of hobbies. You seem to be on the right track though!

thickerdenwater -> RE: Need some critique (2/25/2008 10:42:26 PM)
bahhhhh, I love being perved yes, but I really like the reality checks an outside point of view gives you. My words may be articulated well, but sometimes I come off to strongly offensive, like with the "disgarded" line that I need to re-write. One of my friends described me as a pit bull pulling at his chain and barking a lot, but when you give him a chance hes just another big puppy looking for new friends. Guess I need to let some slack loose in my chain

GreedyTop -> RE: Need some critique (2/25/2008 10:43:25 PM)
you'll do well here, thicker :)

thickerdenwater -> RE: Need some critique (2/25/2008 10:45:18 PM)
life, like many things, is a continuing lesson that if taken lightly and with patience will teach you many things.

AquaticSub -> RE: Need some critique (2/25/2008 10:50:35 PM)
quote: ORIGINAL: GreedyTop you'll do well here, thicker :) I'll second that. Now to crawl off to bed... Greedy, want to join? [;)] PS. Good luck with the rewrites Thicker.

thickerdenwater -> RE: Need some critique (2/25/2008 10:54:52 PM)
thanks again to all who helped. Its much appreciated, and recieved as usual.

GreedyTop -> RE: Need some critique (2/25/2008 10:55:55 PM)
quote: ORIGINAL: AquaticSub quote: ORIGINAL: GreedyTop you'll do well here, thicker :) I'll second that. Now to crawl off to bed... Greedy, want to join? [;)] PS. Good luck with the rewrites Thicker. tease grope

petpete -> RE: Need some critique (2/25/2008 11:47:18 PM)
Its funny how SB said that He doesn't state nothing.. i have noticed its more about how one looks and how one appeals to another more then the words they write and of what they are looking for..

GreedyTop -> RE: Need some critique (2/25/2008 11:49:00 PM)
depends on who's doing the looking, IMO. When I check a profile for a potential, their profile will determine if I initiate contact.

Bound2One -> RE: Need some critique (2/26/2008 1:14:11 AM)
quote: ORIGINAL: thickerdenwater hmm well being deep is definately easy for me. I think I should write more in my journal on here. If I can figure it out, Ill add some depth to the profile itself. But I think Im gong to need to sit back and reflect on that before I post it up. as for getting or holding on to a sub, its a bit of a problem with both. sometimes they come easy, and abruptly disappear (in which case I have no idea what happens) or they just overlook. The profile looks good overall. Nice set of pics. You may want to mention what you're doing with your life - what kind of work, school, etc. You mention what you do during your time off, and that makes inquiring minds want to know what he does when he's working. [;)] I think the idea of a journal is great. You can show your personality, give more details on what you do on a day-to-day basis, things you like to do, expound on the type of girl you are looking for as new things come to mind. Good luck!

Justme696 -> RE: Need some critique (2/26/2008 2:19:39 AM)
quote: ORIGINAL: thickerdenwater Just wanted some feed back on my profile. good, bad, and ugly. Thanks for the help. You should write a profile as you wish it to be. Not what others want to see.

Redoubt -> RE: Need some critique (2/26/2008 7:12:12 AM)
On the whole, I like it... two little bitty points, and I'm nitpicking here, so take whatever you will from it. First, get rid of the T/they... it's the only slashy in your profile and seems unnecessary. Second, naturally dom looking for a dominant woman, because you like a fight I can kinda understand, but it has the effect, for me at least, of saying "I just want a woman, sub, switch or domme... don't care". I may be alone in this viewpoint, but unless you want to be regarded as a switch (with more dominant tendencies), I'd stick with sub/switch females only. It just puts out mixed signals, at least in my opinion. This doesn't mean you can't perve dommes in your area, but by including them in what youre looking for, I think you'll turn more off than intrigue either. Otherwise, I like it.

OmegaG -> RE: Need some critique (2/26/2008 7:23:49 AM)
FR And I totally forgot to mention last night that I love the back piece and am glad that you have such a good picture to display it. I hate when I can almost see a tatoo but can't quite figure out what it is.

thickerdenwater -> RE: Need some critique (2/26/2008 8:15:13 AM)
OmegaG: the back piece is actually all my design, except for the snake head. Its actually 6 pieces of 6 years made to be one piece. Designed it when I was 16 :D Redoubt: Its the finer details like something thats that obscure that I was hoping would be found, thanks. Ill correct that later. Bound2One: right now Im not doing anything, trying to get things together to go to college and looking for a job. I think Ill add what Im going to major in when I get time. Justme696: I used to go by the same thinking, a long time ago. But I found a happy medium where I can still be me without any changes, and still have people interested on some level. Be it personal, professional, or otherwise, people need to be able to like you, not have to like you. If you give them that oppurtunity, others will fall in line, and the gossip will be nothing but praise. This even works for your stranger type people, like myself. Most people (all most exclusively all vanilla) may not agree with parts of my personality, but they respect them and even grow to like them (about me). If I took a "take me for who I am, all or nothing" approach I wouldnt have so many friends (real friends) and aquaintences. This way, Im still me, with out comprimising myself, and they still can like me for who I really am.

ruthiexxxx -> RE: Need some critique (2/26/2008 8:21:27 AM)
yes, a good profile. clear and to the point. mind you the more information the better, sometimes a small thing can just catch the eye and intererest

OmegaG -> RE: Need some critique (2/26/2008 8:23:25 AM)
if you are in transition (which is because you got out of the military?) that would be an interesting tidbit to share.

OmegaG -> RE: Need some critique (2/26/2008 8:24:55 AM)
quote: ORIGINAL: ruthiexxxx yes, a good profile. clear and to the point. mind you the more information the better, sometimes a small thing can just catch the eye and intererest not always, if a profile is too long, some (me) tend not to read it. I think if it like a resume-- you want enough to grab the eye of the potential and to spark an interest for on going communication, but you don't want to overwhelm them so it ends up in the recycle bin.

Justme696 -> RE: Need some critique (2/26/2008 9:06:13 AM)
quote: If I took a "take me for who I am, all or nothing" approach I wouldnt have so many friends (real friends) and aquaintences Personally I think your real friends would stay if you say "take me for who I am". That is why they like you. But I understand what you try to say. We agree..that one should stay loyal to oneselfs.

thickerdenwater -> RE: Need some critique (2/26/2008 9:53:12 AM)
quote: ORIGINAL: Justme696 Personally I think your real friends would stay if you say "take me for who I am". That is why they like you. But I understand what you try to say. We agree..that one should stay loyal to oneselfs. All my friends do take me for who I am, and I take them for who they are. If you dont have a mutual respect for eachother its not really a friendship, and to me, the same goes for signifigant others. But in order to become a friend, things take time, as OmegaG said, to much information all at once can be overwhelming. It can also leave nothing to talk about, explore, or surprise people with.

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