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FOUR STRANGERS AT A BUS STOP?? - 9/13/2009 1:56:02 AM

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FOUR STRANGERS AT A BUS STOP??

Old man down on his luck...bends his knee to pray.
Young girl fresh from school...has no one with which to play.
Street cop with his load of hate...no one knows he's gay.
Me, I stand here all alone... there's nothing I can say.
Old man down on his luck...has holes in both his shoes.
Young girl fresh from school...has post-partum blues.
Street cop with his load of hate...can't pay his union dues.
Me, I stand here all alone...missing all my cues.

And if I spoke what would I say?
And who would want to listen anyway?
But I can't help wondering if they see
things the same way as me.

Old man down on his luck...he's tired of the game.
Young girl fresh from school...her passions all aflame.
Street cop with his load of hate...his conscience has gone lame.
Me, I stand here all alone...feeling very tame.
Old man down on his luck...his pain etched on his face.
Young girl fresh from school...hormones making haste.
Street cop with his load of hate...can't crack a single case.
Me, I stand here all alone...with thoughts that leave no trace.

And if I spoke what would I say?
And who would want to listen anyway?
But I can't help wondering if they see
things the same way as me.

Four strangers on the street...just passin' the time of day.
Four strangers at a bus stop...we each look away.

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RE: FOUR STRANGERS AT A BUS STOP?? - 9/13/2009 3:16:39 AM

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this is awesome!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

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RE: FOUR STRANGERS AT A BUS STOP?? - 9/13/2009 3:27:31 AM

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Wow!! Shit holly you have no idea how happy i am to see your response. This is one of my absolute favourites of all the poems I have written, but nobody besides you has ever given it more than a cursory glance.. Its a really old one, I wrote it back in the early 80s (can't remember just when...I have it somewhere in an old binder). I can't tell you just how much your reply means to me.
Domo Arigato

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RE: FOUR STRANGERS AT A BUS STOP?? - 9/16/2009 9:57:58 PM

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Hello,
I was just glancing thru these forums when i came upon your poem 4 strangers at a bus stop.
Very powerful images. As I was reading it i thought that it might make a good song. I just happen to be a musician who is also a composer. do u have any interest in my possibly composing music so that it could be sung?

Im Patrick. I can give you some samples of my work online if you are interested.

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RE: FOUR STRANGERS AT A BUS STOP?? - 9/17/2009 2:59:50 AM

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I have a brother who is a musician and who writes music...but he has had over 20 years to doanything with this and hasn't, so by allmeans go ahead...I look forward to hearing what you come up with. :)

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RE: FOUR STRANGERS AT A BUS STOP?? - 9/17/2009 3:37:25 AM

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