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Termyn8or -> RE: Whatthefuckisms ! (7/22/2010 9:29:24 PM)
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"Surely, I love reading.
In the worst case I will start to point out grammatical errors and flaws in the storyline. "
I'll have to drill before I spill. I mean you have to literally be like about 330% kinky. It is short story, quite succinct I think. I have gotten reviews on it and the only thing negative I heard was that it lacked feeling, or something like that. I was not as good with the English language back then. For example counsellor is misspelled probably a hundred times. Original comes in second I think.
It has an in depth preface, to express the set and setting, as it is set in the future and the changes that had happened to society had to be outlined. The society is actually near utopic, after some drastic changes. It is BDSM scifi basically. It involves inescapable chastity belts and other bondage devices that would be called "space age material" 400 years in the future. It is written in first person by me and after reading it, is written in a very unusual style.
In it, an engineer in the 1990s finally gets his dream vacation. During that he goes exploring caves in bumfukt Egypt or somewhere and finds a place no human had probaly ever been before. There are the chambers, and it appears there are alien beings within. Being cocky (and kinky) he jumps into one and the lid closes. The friends with him find these chambers to be virtually indestructable and they can't get him out. They decide to go get help, but are killed by a cavein. He is in suspended animation until discovered 396 years later.
He goes through the education process once again to get familiar with the new tecvhnology and excels, and afterwards becomes a noted inventor. But others know of his "other" inventions. Of course he gets rich, but things are different then.
After a time he marries two Women, which is now legal at the time and they are both switches, and I mean serious switches. He has a nice big house in which to play with them as well. He gets into a couple of predicaments of course, but he always wins in the end somehow when it comes to that. He winds up having four kids, and although they were exposed to no kink whatsoever, at least one of them gets kinky and takes over the business as he and his Wives go on vacation. If you like scifi and kink, this might be something you want to look at, despite the errors.
I have considered rewriting it but I do not have the time. It's in about five to seven parts and is published on the internet, but only I have the last parts, and more than one set. Gene Rodenberry used to do that shit too. Write different endings, and others did it.
So the center of the story winds up with four kids, a boy and a girl from each Wife. Like I said they are raised completely vanilla, and do well. But there are a few problems. See the main character is one of those people who will do what they please, and the world is damn lucky that he doesn't please to hurt, or in any way cause any suffering.
Things to remember are that world population is way down from 2010 levels, things are good. Everybody who does anything of value has some land. There are better methods of transportation, but if you pay a special tax you can drive a 1957 Chevy. Technology is near pollution free.
Eventually our hero does something highly illegal, which is to go back in time to his crowd, bestowing modern technology upon their former selves, thus advancing technology at a very enhanced rate. He has better technology than all the governments of the world put together and could take over and be dictator, but simply does not have that kind of greed.
He really fucked up when he decided to go see his old girlfriend from 400 years ago. He went once and nothing much happened, but the second time he was married (contracted) to these two other Women in the future. He had to tell her that he is never coming back. Subsequently he found that she had hooked up with a guy who became violent and almost killed her, maimed her for life. One of his friends in the future fixed that by "restoring the timeline", because that guy was the expert on these things.
Unfortunately the story does end somewhat abruptly because I got the guy getting close to 100 years old. However with that modern medical science that is not that uncommon in that time. In other words I have pretty much used up the main character's timeline.
It is not written all that well, but I think the storyline is good enough. I might rewrite it someday. If you think you are ready for it in it's current form, I will provide a link.
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