chellekitty -> RE: Need some critique (2/25/2008 9:24:17 PM)
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well, here is my $1.50 on your profile... it is a personals site...you're "advertising" yourself for lack of a better word, but you have not told people what the product really is below the surface...while i think that it is awesome that there are others that want to get to know potential signifigant others on a one-on-one basis, if there is something deeper, you have to let others get a glimpse of that deepness on your ad...here's what i thought while reading your profile "yes, you're listed as a Dom...well, wouldn't life be boring without passion...i would shoot myself if i got like that...alrighty then........yea, the picture shows that...do i look like boo-boo, yogi?"....nothing really thought provoking or question inspiring...though by your postings i can already guess that there is more there than that... my suggestion? read a whole bunch of different male Dom profiles...see what sounds shallow, what sounds deep, what sounds asinine, what sounds like it was copied and pasted out of a book or how-to website, what sounds like it is honest and true...and then go from there...and write about you...real sometimes doesn't get massive responses but real gets a higher percentage of real responses...and thats what matters to me... good luck chelle
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