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i need a critique on my profile - 1/1/2010 12:46:05 PM

Dunhamart

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yeah i try to start up conversations with people but no one seems to respond so i started thinking it might be my profile if some one could give me an honest critique that would be great
thanks

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RE: i need a critique on my profile - 1/1/2010 12:50:29 PM

sexyred1

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Your profile is not BAD per se, but you do spend too much time discussing how you don't want to be contacted by "creepy old guys" and how you are not homophobic.

Word of advice, even though I am most definitely not in your sub target market, is not to start out with negatives; it turns off alot of subs. Just talk about YOU and what you are into, are about and the kind of person you want to meet.

Good luck out there....

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RE: i need a critique on my profile - 1/1/2010 12:52:57 PM

wykkidesire2plsU

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i liked alot of your profile, smart and creative is good. The only thing that confused me is you are dominant yet you said anyone that tried to get you to submit would win place in your heart..that is the only part i didnt understand.

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RE: i need a critique on my profile - 1/1/2010 12:57:54 PM

Dunhamart

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as far as challanging a dom thing is a whole martial arts story that takes along time oh well hell
its not so much that i get off on my pain its just i can't feel any
my old martial arts instructer whiped me with a kendo stick while doing forms so yeah now i just want to be reminded that i can feel pain
thats all i still love inflicting it

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RE: i need a critique on my profile - 1/1/2010 12:58:06 PM

Lockit

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Damn... this is the third thread on your profile... I keep thinking I am clicking back on one of the first two. lol

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RE: i need a critique on my profile - 1/1/2010 1:00:55 PM

Dunhamart

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last time i ask people for help
thanks guys

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RE: i need a critique on my profile - 1/1/2010 1:02:07 PM

mnottertail

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thanks for playing, but you can glimpse a little of why nobody will respond if you hold a mirror up to that post.

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RE: i need a critique on my profile - 1/1/2010 1:04:08 PM

sexyred1

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quote:

ORIGINAL: Dunhamart

last time i ask people for help
thanks guys

Ahhhh...see Grasshopper, herein lies the problem. You have gotten good advice from me and others and you childishly reply in this way because you don't like the answers.

You should listen to Uncle Ron, he is major respected here. To be IN the game, you have to learn how to PLAY the game.

End of lecture.

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RE: i need a critique on my profile - 1/1/2010 1:04:54 PM

Dunhamart

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i'm going to change it i already had a feeling that thats probably what was wrong i just had a bunch of friends say that they thought the rant was funny so thats why i kept it on their for so long cause it was a real thing that was bugging me i kept getting messages from old guys so i wanted to make it quite obvious that its not the kind of attention i wanted

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RE: i need a critique on my profile - 1/1/2010 1:09:04 PM

Dunhamart

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great how the hell do i delete all this crap

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RE: i need a critique on my profile - 1/1/2010 1:09:05 PM

CalifChick

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You might want to rethink those three negative journal entries in a row. And a little more attention to punctuation and spacing twice between paragraphs would help people to read what you have to say instead of feeling their eyes glaze over.

Cali

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RE: i need a critique on my profile - 1/1/2010 1:10:40 PM

flogger

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Game huh?

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RE: i need a critique on my profile - 1/1/2010 1:12:04 PM

Dunhamart

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is it ok to turn back now or have i already made a holy ass of my self

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RE: i need a critique on my profile - 1/1/2010 1:14:01 PM

RedMagic1

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Don't worry. Everyone assifies themselves from time to time. The thing that makes the difference is if you pick yourself up, dust yourself off, and be a decent guy again. That'll earn you more respect than if you were soo cautious you never ever said anything wrong.

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RE: i need a critique on my profile - 1/1/2010 1:19:53 PM

DarkSteven

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Is Ron only an uncle? I figured he'd be a grandpa or great uncle by now...

OP, I'll echo what the others have said. You start off your profile by complaining about gay old men who hit on you. Then you spend four sentences addressing that.

Some of your grammar makes no sense: "as long as you respect my exit only I'm okay." "I'm a barbarian at heart (5'11" 180 lbs)" .

Also, who cares that you're into almost everything and that you have few limits? The Dom should be expecting certain activities, not the sub. If you want them and she wants them or is okay with them, that's it. it sounds almost like you're saying that you're open to doing what subs want, which is confusing.

Finally - your friends. They are all young women. No couples, no men. My impression is that you haven't met anyone yet, and they're all online friends that you may have cybered with. The people that I know have all sorts of people as friends, just the ones they like.

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RE: i need a critique on my profile - 1/1/2010 1:27:29 PM

CalifChick

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quote:

ORIGINAL: Dunhamart

great how the hell do i delete all this crap

Which crap would that be? You're going to have to get a bit more specific.

Cali

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RE: i need a critique on my profile - 1/1/2010 1:28:48 PM

Dunhamart

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i meant all the extra posts i did i seemed to have un intentionally pissed a lot of people off kind of don't want want to keep that up

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RE: i need a critique on my profile - 1/1/2010 1:29:56 PM

LadyPact

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If you cross posted the same question across multiple forums, some of them will get pulled. It's a TOS thing.

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RE: i need a critique on my profile - 1/1/2010 1:30:34 PM

Lockit

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Okay, I am kind of feeling sorry for the kid. lol

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RE: i need a critique on my profile - 1/1/2010 1:30:56 PM

CalifChick

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Ahh, there's another lesson for you. You don't get to delete forum posts that you have had a change of heart on. It will be there forever. Hasn't anyone ever told you that the internet is forever?

Cali

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