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RE: i need a critique on my profile - 1/1/2010 8:15:59 PM

DrkJourney

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Hmmm....I might have to go see that-un in person then

for research purposes only of course...lol

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RE: i need a critique on my profile - 1/1/2010 8:33:59 PM

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No i don't put pictures of my cock up I sort of feel that's tasteless (Then again how some of you guys felt about the whole rant i had before hand. I understand how some would think I'm capable of sinking that low.)

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RE: i need a critique on my profile - 1/1/2010 8:41:10 PM

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The whole cock thing is just us kidding around; I don't care if someone DOES do it, but no biggie.

Well, mine is.

Never mind.

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RE: i need a critique on my profile - 1/1/2010 9:23:24 PM

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Now I would take out all the things where you say that it's not a requirement but nice to have. To avoid a thin/fat hijack, think of it this way. Say you had in your profile this: I just swoon over redheads, but it's not a requirement.

How do you think all the brunettes, blondes, etc., are going to react to that? Do you think any one of them will give you a chance? Doubtful, because you've just told them they will always be second-best.

You can say, "I go for the athletic type", or "I prefer slim women", or "I prefer active women" or something like that, without the negative, second-best label of "but it's not a requirement."

Also, I would take out all the beginner/expert designations in your interest list, unless it is VERY important (such as your martial arts). When I see someone who says they are an expert in getting messages, I just roll my eyes. Same with expert in walking (for instance).

I would also take off your dislikes (bird watching and fishing) as well as your hates (volunteerism). The likelihood that you will show an interest in a secretly bird watching, fishing volunteer girl is slim to none, and including them is just one more negative that you don't really need.

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RE: i need a critique on my profile - 1/4/2010 7:38:47 AM

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ok Dan just my opinion.I wouldnt mention submission moves in bed....spells maybe danger.Also the fling while your looking isnt all that attractive.And last but not least even tho you know what your seeking you might not want to describe your perfect girl phycially thats a turn off even to one that might be.Godd luck bro

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RE: i need a critique on my profile - 1/4/2010 11:23:52 AM

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quote:

yeah i try to start up conversations with people but no one seems to respond so i started thinking it might be my profile if some one could give me an honest critique that would be great

Seeing a profile written in decent English, and then receiving a message like the sentence here - bad grammar, bad spelling, no punctuation - will turn a lot of people off, and it looks like you had someone else write your profile, as your English is lacking, and you apparently don't think you need to be respectful to the person you are talking to.

Secondly, crossposting across forums when that is against the rules will mean to many that you are not a team player.

It does not matter what you put in your profile, 50% of being successful, anywhere in society, is behaviour. You send in a nice resume, and then walk into the meeting with black teeth, it's sayonara.

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RE: i need a critique on my profile - 1/4/2010 12:45:24 PM

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quote:

ORIGINAL: antipode

Seeing a profile written in decent English, and then receiving a message like the sentence here - bad grammar, bad spelling, no punctuation -

Technically, the only flaw with the excerpt you quoted was lack of punctuation (unless you want to nitpick the disjointing of "someone").

The spelling and grammatical structure, if punctuation is introduced, are just fine.

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RE: i need a critique on my profile - 1/4/2010 6:54:48 PM

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I don't know who that schmuck is that you use for an avatar...But that fucker is no 'Pac.

Here is the dealio. Take this to the fucking bank. I can get you more ass than a toilet seat if you take this shit to heart.

Don't mention right off the bat how you don't dig the fatties. You can sort these fuckers out once your inbox runneth over.

Talk about your honesty, chicks eat this kind of shit up. Mention how you cared for a dying realtive. You are a domly motherfucker but even Stevie wonder could not help but notice your altruistic side.

Don't talk about flings. Even the most fling worthy and plundered of slits wants to be held in a special light. She thinks it's a relationship you think it's a fling...What the fuck? So she was wrong...Oh well. These things tend to happen.

No woman really gives a shit about your love for all things Chuck Norris. Scrap that shit immediately. Talk about your travels abroad and how you search for just the right soulmate to join you on your future journeys.

Hope this helps. Honesty is always the best policy and profile. Don't forget to attach at least a dozen cock shots, whether they are yours or not....total deal sealer.

Good plundering!!!

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RE: i need a critique on my profile - 1/4/2010 7:25:34 PM

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Dude, I can't believe you give this kinda shit away!

Guidance like this is priceless. You are A very giving man!

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RE: i need a critique on my profile - 1/6/2010 8:01:57 AM

Dunhamart

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ok guys how bout that?

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RE: i need a critique on my profile - 1/6/2010 8:24:59 AM

mnottertail

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that is far and away better than your original, and you seem to be better with the rough social mores out here.

Good one on ya.

Ron

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