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RE: A Poem - 3/2/2008 3:42:55 PM

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ORIGINAL: Aileen1968

I'm very sad. My dam has never erupted like the mother load.

trust me, its pretty scary the first times it happens!

Come on you guys.

If Woody Allen and Yogi Bera had a bastard poetchild it would totally spout lines like that. And it would publish way more poetry than you.

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RE: A Poem - 3/2/2008 3:45:07 PM

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But now really, are you claiming that you did indeed spend the time and energy to enter into the original poem with your imagination and an open heart? The impression I got was that you pretty much dismissed it out of hand.

As I didnt know its content and I enjoy poetry I went into reading it with an open mind, I wouldnt flame something purely because it was there, it was once I read it that I decided that its content was less than good, and then I dismissed it because of what it evoked in me and what I thought the intent was. I felt it was written to inspire a lot of ego rubbing which personally isnt my thing. I feel that many of the other poems that were put on here were far more honest and open and took more guts to post than the initial. Thats my opinion. It was rubbish to me, that doesnt mean that everyone will find it rubbish but I cant see a redemption in it and therefore that is my take on it.

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RE: A Poem - 3/2/2008 3:47:29 PM

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whew, i think some people are way too serious here, but then again i really like waffles so what do i know?

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RE: A Poem - 3/2/2008 3:48:05 PM

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ORIGINAL: BitaTruble

Wretched blast of cold, crisp wind
Beats the furrowed brow
Touching shadowed, corpselike skin
And wrinkled, darkened scowl.
Such anger, unbeknownst to them
Who seek a hollow laugh,
Belittles man to syncopate
A life such lived so well
Horrid abjuration, unheeded far to oft
Bellowed to that cold, crisp wind
Is a sound so very lost.

Now, I could just have said 'ditto', but, in the spirit and all ... ::grins:: I think anyone who is willing to put a piece of themselves out there for all the world to see has some kind of guts going on and that rocks regardless of whether such effort is appreciated by the masses.

Celeste

I'm sorry, Celeste, but "oft" is a hard limit I won't apologize for.

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RE: A Poem - 3/2/2008 3:48:45 PM

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whew, i think some people are way too serious here, but then again i really like waffles so what do i know?

lol that is totally the second time in as many days you have mentioned waffles, im thinking you may need a 12 step program :P

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RE: A Poem - 3/2/2008 3:50:32 PM

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lady lady lady
there is no bad porn!!!!!!!

Hey, no plagiarism.
You got that from a fortune cookie at that discount Chinese place on Clifton Hill in Niagara Falls, didn't you?
Fess up.

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RE: A Poem - 3/2/2008 3:51:48 PM

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But when it sucks it sucks....Have you ever ate at someone's house and the food sucked?...Same deal. nice attempt but where is the fuckin' pizza? I nthis case the op invited himself and his rather pompous profile into "our house."

It wasn't very creative. Totally self serving. I could do better in minutes. It would be even more self serving and sappy.

I looked at his profile and pic...I knew I recognized him!

Domi, there's nothing wrong with you that a decent mentor couldn't fix.

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RE: A Poem - 3/2/2008 3:52:54 PM

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whew, i think some people are way too serious here, but then again i really like waffles so what do i know?

lol that is totally the second time in as many days you have mentioned waffles, im thinking you may need a 12 step program :P

lol...well, what if i mentioned pork rinds or canned shrimp sandwiches? would that get me off the 12 step program hook?

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RE: A Poem - 3/2/2008 3:53:57 PM

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whew, i think some people are way too serious here, but then again i really like waffles so what do i know?

lol that is totally the second time in as many days you have mentioned waffles, im thinking you may need a 12 step program :P

lol...well, what if i mentioned pork rinds or canned shrimp sandwiches? would that get me off the 12 step program hook?

Nah i think you are too far gone lady, no redemption now hehe

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RE: A Poem - 3/2/2008 3:56:33 PM

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ORIGINAL: SteelofUtah

Fair enough Noah

Tear apart as you will

~Of Things I've Done~

I look with eyes of honesty
in this world of deciet and lies
for a girl who waits in sinserity
for another pair of honest eyes.

I am not perfect I must confess
my past is filled with tears
as a Master I have made mistakes
and earned scars throughout the years

a slave is a responsibility
in my youth I took too soon
I took their gift and returned not
and lay wake in all but ruin

I learned my trade on broken things
and the beliefs I've torn apart
for the slave she trusted all I was
her reward a broken heart

I am not perfect of this I've said
Today I try my best
I lead my slave the best I can
and lay my past to rest

I don't forget the person I was
all too quick to take
promises made today I keep
and ammends today I make

I've been entrusted a human life
she gave herself to me
a Man who's made a million wrongs
I wonder if she'll see

I never question her dilligence
as once I did my own
she's the sweetest any man could want
and the only love I've ever known

Steel ~~ 2006

I might strike the "and" from the last line ...

Aw fuck it. Never mind. I say we just magnet this one right up on the refrigerator next to the OP.

(BTW, is there an eternal sale on iambic pentameter somewhere?)

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RE: A Poem - 3/2/2008 3:57:23 PM

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oh hell....

~~stands up and says, hello everyone, i'm a waffleholic~~

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RE: A Poem - 3/2/2008 3:58:36 PM

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Acceptance is the first step, we are all here to support you

*claps*

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RE: A Poem - 3/2/2008 4:01:56 PM

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ORIGINAL: SL4V3M4YB3

Poems really belong here or somewhere else they will be lost forever and never looked at again.

Don't try to stuff us in your little box, man.

Well, some of us probably wouln't mind.

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RE: A Poem - 3/2/2008 4:07:31 PM

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thanks colouredin, sniffles....got any maple syrup on ya?

~~looks around the room...ok, i'm not only a waffleholic; i'm a spicyporkrindstillmovingredmeatloverdarkbeerjeffffcarnivoreaholic~~~

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RE: A Poem - 3/2/2008 4:08:33 PM

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ORIGINAL: colouredin
... As everyone else has given it a go i thought i would put one of my angsty teen hormone filled poems up :D

The dark grip that pulls me down
The scarlet slash that releases me
The grey thoughts that fill my head
The golden light that soothes me

The reason that I wake
The reason that I cry
The reason that I laugh
The reason that I sleep

The black cloud that pulls me back
The violet marks that fill me
The white pain that holds my hand
The light aura that heals me

The reason that I wake
The reason that I cry
The reason that I laugh
The reason that I sleep

Decided to show us yours after all, huh?
It's sorta cute.

I'm buying everything but the purple me and
isn't that cloud more drawing than pulling?
You tell me.

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RE: A Poem - 3/2/2008 4:11:17 PM

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lol posting other poems is as much taking the focus of the OP as porn talk is :P
(Not that I mind it)

Ha i suppose you are right, there wasnt really any point to the initial thread, my bad :P

I think what she means to say is that she couldn't figure out the intitial point of the thread. Her bad.

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RE: A Poem - 3/2/2008 4:15:23 PM

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ORIGINAL: christine1

my other nickname is "roadkill"
but i'm the "all season" model.

I believe it was the poet Hendrix who said:

Tire tracks all across your back
I can see you've had your fun

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RE: A Poem - 3/2/2008 4:16:46 PM

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ORIGINAL: KyttynTheMynx

Noah, I am not the greatest poet in the world by a long shot, but you could have written that a tad better. Care to try again?

Nah thanks.

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RE: A Poem - 3/2/2008 4:18:06 PM

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I gotta say, that you really made me laugh when I read that, and I believe that we all see your point, thanks :D

Damn that slippery zipper.

You're welcome.

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RE: A Poem - 3/2/2008 4:21:23 PM

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whew, i think some people are way too serious here, but then again i really like waffles so what do i know?

lol that is totally the second time in as many days you have mentioned waffles, im thinking you may need a 12 step program :P

lol...well, what if i mentioned pork rinds or canned shrimp sandwiches? would that get me off the 12 step program hook?